People are living longer today than in the past. How do you explain this?

It’s

obviously

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obvious

that people are living longer than before which are

rely

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relying

on many factors. The fundamental factors which are considered would be

medication

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and

food

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. In the past, the medical knowledge and facilities were far behind; if people get sick, they will choose

take

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to take

rest

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a rest

because of consult a doctor is

luxury

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a luxury

; not everyone can afford. Only rich people can afford the doctor’s fee;

therefore

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if someone got

serious

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seriously

ill may not recover

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from

their

own

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owner

Also

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, particular sickness has no effective medicine or vaccine

such

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as smallpox. Smallpox is highly

infection

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infectious

infective

, so that’s the reason why people in the past will die so fast. Once people infected without proper

medication

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, the dead rate in the past

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was

high. But now, we have

matured developed

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matured, developed

on vaccine,

medication

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and radiology help the world to fight and prevent deceases,

therefore

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in today most of the human being will live longer.

Besides

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medication

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, healthy

food

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is another factor for people can live longer nowadays. Living standard for most people were poor in the past, they can’t pay for nutrient and healthy

food

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to support their daily body intake requirement. Have enough

food

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to feed is hard to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

, they might only have very basic

food

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like sweet potato or sweet corn; even don’t have another choice

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food

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varieties.

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, people in

this

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century can eat whatever they like, meat, poultry, organic veggie, cereal and fruit, etc. We have enough nutrition to support our life. As conclude, when compared previous decade and today, people

are benefit

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are benefiting

have benefited

from technology on way of growing

food

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to maximize the yield to cater the global needs, experiment on

medication

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to minimize the deceases to make people can live longer.

However

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, we have to start concern about population aging people that will have very soon.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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299 words

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