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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #access #information
Peoples lives have become ever-so complicated and the need for a vast amount of
information
 on a whim is quite
prevalant
most frequent or common
prevalent
. For
this
 reason it is in my best judgement to say that the increase in
accessabilitiy
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
 to the
worlds
Suggestion
world's
world
 knowledge through the world-wide-web is the best thing for our
civiliation
the social process whereby societies achieve an advanced stage of development and organization
civilisation
civilization
. Not only does it allow for quick referencing of
information but
Accept comma addition
information, but
 it is a valuable tool for individuals and groups to research and educate themselves and those of others. The ability to request
information
 through numerous search engines and have thousands of results on a topic is one reason why our society is progressing so quickly. As the majority of people worldwide have access to some sort of electronic device connected to the
internet
, we can relay
information
 faster than ever. While being certain
the the
definite article
the
information
 attained is accurate from reliable sources. Acquiring
information
 within a short time period is ideal for many people in different industries. Whether it be a market researcher or
an
Suggestion
a
 university
undergradute
a university student who has not yet received a first degree
undergraduate
undergraduates
, both of whom will require rapid details and statistics for many different topics, the quicker the process the better. Furthering their knowledge and broadening their scope of research will help them to obtain a better result with their work or studies. Whilst there will always be a wealth of knowledge within the world's literature produced on paper in the forms of books, the amount of
information
 on the
internet
 is near infinite.
This
 is certainly a benefit to all who use the
internet
 and I suggest to anyone who uses the
internet
 to find something new and dive into it and learn as much as possible while they can.
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