Some people think that mobile phones are harmful for children while other disagree. discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Opinions
are differ
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differ
have differed
as
wheather
introduces two alternatives
whether
weather
water
regarding mobile
phone
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has
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
impact or not on children. In my opinion,
moblie
migratory
mobile
phone
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exert negative impact on children if it will be used
continuesly
at every point
continuously
continually
. All the facts related to it will be discussed in
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paragraphs. On the one hand, nowadays everyone has their own mobile
phone
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even children
also
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
some people hold the view that
mobilephone
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the mobile phone
mobile phone
has tremendous effect on
children especially
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children, especially
on
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in
for
their education as they give more priority to have
conversation
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conversations
a conversation
with friends on different social apps as
compare
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comparing
to give more attention to their studies.
As a result
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, using cell
phone
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in
earlier age
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earlier ages
an earlier age
, distract them to their education which is most crucial in order to get higher grades to achieve
success future
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successful futures
successful future
a successful future
.
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, some considered that it is fruitful for offsprings because nowadays
number
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a number
of applications are founded and out of those some are highly valuable for them.
For example
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, most famous application
YouTube which
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YouTube, which
provide
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provides
plenty of videos regarding every recreational
activities
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activity
. By watching video on
it in
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it, in
which children have
interest
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an interest
interests
, can learn many things as well as they are more likely to be
expert
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an expert
experts
. In conclusion, l opine that
although
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it gives many opportunities to develop mind in different creativities but
usage
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the usage
of it for them is harmful because
this
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is the age when they start to create their mind to do
thing
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things
a thing
by themselves.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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