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Teleworking has been on the increase in recent years. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Today, working within virtual spaces is trending among worker society.
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 is a good trend and
bring
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benefit
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 for employees as it
give
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more
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time
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 to focus on what is important. Working virtually can save more
time
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 and make individuals more productive. The saved
time
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 can be used to do more tasks.
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, In
metropolitan
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a metropolitan
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cities
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city
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cities
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such
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 as Jakarta,
people
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 usually spend
time
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 more than 1 hour just to commute from their home to the office.
People
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 used to meet another person to discuss something that can be discussed by call or video call. Today, Zoom and Google Meet can facilitate an online meeting that can save minutes or even hours
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 moving from one place to another place just to attend an offline meeting. Workers could be more productive if they
spend
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 it on working rather than
trapped
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on
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 traffic
jam
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 just to attend a
15 minutes of
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15-minute
 meeting.
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, less
time
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 will be spent on something unproductive and give employees more
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 to focus on their
job
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jobs
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. Teleworking
also
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 could help boost mental health
among
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in
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 society. Less
time
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 to spend on travelling between home and office means more
time
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 to do something more after office hours.
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,
people
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 can have more quality
time
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 for their loved ones.
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,
people
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 can immediately meet with their family or their friends and spend the
time
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 to do something more fun like watching a movie after working hours.
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 to that, it can reduce the amount of stress after long
hour
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hours
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 of
works
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work
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. The activities can boost relationships between individuals and their family and friends which eventually will make
work life
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work-life
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 balance. In conclusion, teleworking
bring
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 more benefits as it can reduce the amount of stress from unproductive
time
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 spent on commuting.
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, it can boost productivity toward quality of work and
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 can give more
time
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 for individuals to spend
time
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 on family and friends.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulate your viewpoint.
task achievement
Well-supported arguments with relevant examples.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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