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some people think that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others argue it is the responsibility of each individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #duty #citizens #diet #responsibility
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Well, Access to healthy
food
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 will sometimes term difficult for most of the people, be it due to several reasons, say lack of enough money to accrue them or not developing taste buds towards them or even finding healthy
food
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 in the market is impossible since most of the foods nowadays are all adulterated. Though it is the responsibility of the government to look into
this
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 regards, citizens of the respective country
too
in the direction of
to
 hold control of their
food
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 intake pattern, as said, you are king of your own system, no one could even tamper it externally provided they introduce chemicals into
you
of you or yourself
your
. Each one of you should be aware of your system needs and feed them
accordingly
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 in order to thrive best in the society.
Conclusion
Suggestion
The conclusion
 goes in both ways, only if the government provides
healthy source
Suggestion
a healthy source
 of
food
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 to the citizens of their countries and only if the people understand the importance of health boosting foods we will be able to bring
on
Suggestion
about
 positive results in the environment.

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