describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

#leisure #time #disavantages

Hello everyone! I’m a beginner in IELTS and I hope all members in the Speaking IELTS group help me to improve four skills in English. Today, I would like to tell you about

of me or myself

leisure

time

Leisure

time

is very necessary for many people in the world after stressful work and study. There are many ways to

entertrain

Suggestion

enter train

such

as: listening to

music

, reading books, cooking some dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, going out with friends… In my spare

time

, I usually listen to

music

and I can say it is my

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

leisure

activities. I began

listen

Suggestion

to listen

listening

music

when I was 12 years old. I like listening to English

music

because there are many benefits. Every

day

, I spend four to five minutes listening to English

music

and it helps me to learn a lot of vocabulary. I

often listening

Suggestion

am often listening

often listen

some songs

such

as: on my ways, all falls down… The other reason that I love listening to

music

is that it makes me feel relax and happy after studying hard. I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening because I can do a lot of

thing

Suggestion

things

when I stay at home

such

as: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing

day

so many young people usually stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends

Suggestion

Facebook. Lifestyle now a

day

is more modern than in the past so many people always spend

time

enjoying new

technology but

Accept comma addition

technology, but

I still enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel very happy and peaceful. In my

view point

a mental position from which things are viewed

viewpoint

, there are positive side and negative side about having

leisure

time

. Let’s begin by

locking

appearing to be as specified; usually used as combining forms

looking

positive side

Suggestion

the positive side

Firstly

, having

leisure

time

helps people relax and feel happy in their world.

Secondly

, when they play

game

Suggestion

games

online in computer – it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world.

On the other hand

, having much

leisure

time

come with

string

Suggestion

a string

the string

of bad points

such

as: bore dome, anxiety even depression. It can lead to bad habit making, lack of focus as well as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids now.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

383 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

Include an introduction and conclusion

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