describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

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of me or myself

leisure

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time

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Leisure

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time

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is very necessary for many people in the world after stressful work and study. There are many ways to

entertrain

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enter train

such

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as: listening to

music

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, reading books, cooking some dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, going out with friends… In my spare

time

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, I usually listen to

music

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and I can say it is my

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

leisure

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activities. I began

listen

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to listen

listening

music

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when I was 12 years old. I like listening to English

music

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because there are many benefits. Every

day

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, I spend four to five minutes listening to English

music

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and it helps me to learn a lot of vocabulary. I

often listening

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am often listening

often listen

some songs

such

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as: on my ways, all falls down… The other reason that I love listening to

music

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is that it makes me feel relax and happy after studying hard. I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening because I can do a lot of

thing

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things

when I stay at home

such

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as: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing

day

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day

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so many young people usually stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends

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Facebook. Lifestyle now a

day

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is more modern than in the past so many people always spend

time

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enjoying new

technology but

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technology, but

I still enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel very happy and peaceful. In my

view point

a mental position from which things are viewed

viewpoint

, there are positive side and negative side about having

leisure

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time

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. Let’s begin by

locking

appearing to be as specified; usually used as combining forms

looking

positive side

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the positive side

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, having

leisure

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time

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helps people relax and feel happy in their world.

Secondly

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, when they play

game

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games

online in computer – it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world.

On the other hand

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, having much

leisure

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time

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come with

string

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a string

the string

of bad points

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as: bore dome, anxiety even depression. It can lead to bad habit making, lack of focus as well as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids now.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

383 words

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describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that the only important thing in life is his or her work. Without a successful career, life is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many young people leave school with negative attitudes towards learning. What are the causes？How to encourage young people to study？

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation of committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.