The chart below shows the destination of students graduated from physics courses and Art & Design courses in a European country in 2017.
This
graph shows in
2017 the destination of Change preposition
apply
students
graduated
from Correct pronoun usage
who graduated
physics
courses and Art
& Design
courses in a European country.
In the subject of Art
& Design
, most of the students
' destination
are Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
employment
which Replace the word
employed
the
percentage Correct article usage
a
almost
arrived 70. But in Change preposition
of almost
Physics
, employment was not the only option for most of them, also
a large part of them choose to have a
Correct article usage
apply
further
study.
As we can see that the number of students
in Art
& Design
who choose further
study and working and studying was the least, both of them were about 8%. Then
the percentage of unemployed and others were close. In Physics
, the percentage of another three destination
were approximate.
In summary, we can know Change to a plural noun
destinations
whatever
in Correct word choice
that
Physics
or Art
& Design
, employment was the most of the graduated students
want
to choose.Wrong verb form
wanted
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