Some people argue that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In the face of unwanted circumstances, people either choose to accept or prevail. Debates
arises
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arise
as both options are seemingly justified, yet I go for the former and believe that
such
way can give me better inner peace. Acceptance can free us from negative thinking and mind-destructing concerns. We always face undesirable situations of life, so when we accept it as a nature of life, we liberate our
mind
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minds
.
As a result
, we can avoid pessimistic thinking.
This
is indeed a relief, giving us
wider way
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a wider way
for other practical focus.
Such
deliverance is highly appreciated in meditation tenets whose ultimate goal is to liberate us from unnecessary, unavoidable concerns during our lifetime.
This
is
particular
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particularly
helpful when it comes to job dissatisfaction. Those with greater tolerance to
such
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
conditions can keep him secure from doing
this
job; he might quit and become financially risky
otherwise
. More importantly, practicing equanimity in
face
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the face
of adversity is
also
beneficial in
long term
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the long term
, helping us to ignore what harms us. The letting-go practice allows us to live more happily and in a more fulfilled manner.
Such
attitude is practiced and spread amongst many religious beliefs and psychological books. On the
flipside
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flip side
, there exist benefits to be reaped when pursuing the promising outcome of overcoming
unmet
expectation because
such
attitude can be the foundation for greater achievements. With a hope of ameliorating the stumbling blocks, individuals will become more
perseverant
persistent determination
perseverance
, athletes could put great
endeavors
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
, and politicians might try harder policies to pursue their own goals.
However
, they
surely confront
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are surely confronted
great pressures, boredom and exhaustion, or even more catastrophic result. A testament to take into consideration is the unquenchable desire of some women who never accept aging and their natural beauty, deciding to go under
knife
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the knife
, and many
have suffer
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have suffered
fatal incidents or implications coming along their life. More dangerously, our desire is endless, when it is satisfied, it becomes greater, and it is a vicious circle. History is an epitome
for
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of
this
: thousand of wars took place because of one notion—improving
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
conditions.
Therefore
, I believe that the “letting-go” attitude is the right path to our liberation despite so-called and deceitful merits brought by the perception of prevailing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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