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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe
that is
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 pointless to care animals in the 21st century because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with
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 point of view. It is simply absurd to argue that animals do not have a place in our current century.
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 with, the Earth and wildlife have existed a long time ago before the human race appeared. In
this
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 way, the planet not only exist for the benefit of mankind. Indeed, we are creatures as well as animals who belong to
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 planet, they have the same right to exist here.
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, there is no compelling reason why we should let animals die. In fact, even if the population grown in an extreme way, there would be enough space in
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 world to co-exist side by side with wildlife.
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Moreover humans
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Moreover, humans
, as the top of evolution chain, should find solutions in order to live together. Apart from the practical arguments, I
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 disagree with the idea that the aim of conserving fauna is considered as a waste of resources. It is usually the protection of natural reserves and the environment, all according to one relevant reason: The society needs the nature to subsist.
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, rainforests produce oxygen absorbing the dioxide of carbon, which is toxic to us,
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 it helps to stabilize the Earth`s climate.
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, efforts should be made in order to preserve the nature and living ecosystems, if we destroyed these areas, the cost of managing the results would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By protecting them, we maintain the natural balance of our planet. By way of conclusion, there will be always a place for flora and fauna in the Earth, and I believe that we should do everything to protect them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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