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An increasing number of people of all ages are getting information from electronic products, and some people tend to argue printed books as well as magazines are no longer needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, information is very well-known to be mostly kept online.
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 has led to an argument by many people regarding the relevancy of printed books and zines.
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 with the advance of
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 paperbacks have now become rare to sight, countless beneficial points are actually available in
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 version of literacy.
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, I believe that there are elements in printed reading materials that can not be changed. Supporting the usage of e-books might have some correlation towards the paperless movement and saving the environment. Correspondingly, many people are leaning towards these movements
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 of the portable characteristics of the product. Digital information can be accessed everywhere, and whenever you want.
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, brands like Kindle
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 a similar approach for a community
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 is in search of great alternatives that can be used
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 their schedule.
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, many people stick
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 the original shape of it, since they find it more entertaining than the other. Some might feel the excitement, a rush of adrenaline prior to opening a physical book that they just brought.
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 smartphones and tablets can give the same type of purpose, there are higher chances of us getting distracted by other applications.
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, a simple notification can ruin an entire study plan. In conclusion, the physical form of literacy is built with many aspects that are not available in the electronic form of it,
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 it is still relevant
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this
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 day onward. In my opinion, even with the aggressive move of the modern world, some things still work the best as their previous shape.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Cost-effective
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen fatigue
  • Credibility
  • Rigorous editing
  • Fact-checking
  • Overhead costs
  • Physical storage space
  • Updated instantaneously
  • Remote areas
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Digital consumption
  • Paper waste
  • Tactile experience
  • Eye strain
  • Reliability
  • Misleading
  • Digital devices
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