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Some people argue that the importance of public libraries is decreasing because of the technological development,so allocating national budget on them is a waste of money.To what extent,do you agree with this statement?

Some
people
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 argue that public
libraries
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 are becoming less important
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 technological advancements, and
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 government funding for them is a waste of money.
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 it is true that technology has reduced
people
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’s dependence on physical
libraries
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, I disagree that allocating national budgets to them is unnecessary. On the one hand, rapid technological development has significantly changed the way
people
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access
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 information. In the past, individuals had to visit
libraries
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 to search for historical records, academic materials, or even cooking recipes. Nowadays, most information is available instantly through search engines and digital platforms.
This
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 convenience allows
people
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 to save time and
access
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 resources from the comfort of their homes.
As a result
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, the number of library visitors may decline, leading some to believe that maintaining public
libraries
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 is no longer cost-effective.
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, public
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 continue to play an essential role in promoting literacy and supporting communities.
Libraries
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 provide free
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 to books and study spaces, especially for students and individuals from low-income families who may not have reliable internet
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.
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,
libraries
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 have evolved into multifunctional spaces where
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 can attend educational programs, community events, and reading activities. In recent years, many young
people
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 and families have been encouraged by social media trends to revisit
libraries
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, which helps foster reading habits and lifelong learning.
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, many readers still prefer printed books, as they offer a more focused and immersive reading experience compared to digital screens. In conclusion,
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 technology has transformed how information is obtained, public
libraries
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 remain valuable institutions.
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, allocating national funds to support and
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libraries
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 is not a waste of money but rather a wise investment in public education and literacy.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it in every part of the essay.
content
Give more strong and close examples to back each point.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas so the map is smooth.
grammar
Keep long sentences short and easy to read. This helps grammar.
lexical resource
Avoid repeating the same idea; use new angles.
structure
Clear stance and good structure.
response
Balanced view with counter point.
content
Use of good examples such as access to internet and printed books.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • community hubs
  • technological development
  • access to digital devices
  • educational workshops
  • community gatherings
  • e-books
  • audiobooks
  • digital resources
  • physical space
  • learning opportunities
  • socioeconomic statuses
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