Some people think that government should not give international aid since they have disadvantages people like unemployment and homeless in their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Evolution of globalization makes the connection between countries stronger. Nowadays, every
country
is finding useful resources for their economic growth. The government of these countries uses these resources to earn money in order to progress and to provide international
aid
to those countries who are in need.
However
, some people offend
such
actions of their nation's government. I disagree with
this
statement and will provide credible reasons to prove.
Firstly
, I believe that providing international
aid
will help the
country
itself because
this
can strengthen their relationship, among other nations and will open a door to many opportunities.
For instance
, when the richest
country
provides health and education facilities to the poor
country
,
this
will enable them to recruit more staff to work in that
country
which will solve their problem of unemployment.
Moreover
, working in these areas might improve the resources of the poor nation which will
further
open more scopes in these sectors.
Also
, setting up industries in various nations will turn out to be the two way profit. Like, Telecommunication industries benefit both giver and recipient nations.
Secondly
, providing assistance on natural calamities occurrences like earthquake, floods etc. Are what we called humanity. Every
country
should have the separate foreign
aid
account for the sake of humanity.
This
can help the suffered nation to recover fast. When the developed countries give
aid
and abet to underdeveloped nations in return they get some share to use their resources.
For example
, USA, holding shares in oil companies of the Middle East nations. In the end, I think it would be appropriate to say that the international subsidy will be useful in eradicating poverty, unemployment, and homelessness in their own
homey
Suggestion
homes
home
rather than creating it.
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