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Some people believe that newspaper is the best way to learn about news. However, others believe that a more effective way is through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Newspaper
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The newspaper
 is always one of the most popular media in our daily life. Some individuals hold the view that
newspaper
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 is the best way to know what has happened in the world, while those opponents consider other media as more effective ways. From my perspective, there are some other better ways to learn about
news
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the news
 despite of
newspaper
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.
First
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 of all,
internet
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 spreads news more efficiently. More details, compared with
newspaper
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, disseminating news through
internet
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 doesn’t need printing and transporting, which results in a great saving on the time demanded, so that the things happened can be issued in short without a time-consuming and complex process.
Therefore
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,
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internet
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the internet
 has
advantage
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the advantage
an advantage
advantages
 on the timeliness of news.
This
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 is illustrated by a fact that the earthquake that took place in 2008 in
Wenchuan China
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Wenchuan, China
 when we can get
information
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 about the latest situation
of
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on
 it immediately through
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internet
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the internet
,
instead
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 of learning from
newspaper
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 after at least one day.
In addition
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, TV is the media that offers people better understanding on what happened in comparison with
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newspaper
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the newspaper
. To be more specific,
TV
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the TV
 is able to broadcast news with the video and the audio concerned, which provides a more intuitive feeling for those who are watching, thereby enabling them to know the events more accurately.
Consequently
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,
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,
this
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 more vivid media
works
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work
 better on
intuition
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the intuition
 of
news
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the news
.
However
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, some people disagree and believe that
newspaper
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 supply us with more reliable news.
That is
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 to say, the news on the
newspaper
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 must be reviewed and checked before printed and issued, which leads to the correction and the cut of the inaccurate and false
information
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.
Hence
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, the news published on
newspaper
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 is of high accuracy.
Nonetheless
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,
this
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 advantage
also
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 exists in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 kind of media since the force of supervision towards the news on any platform has been strengthened these years and the laws has
also
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 stipulated the punishment for false news.
As a result
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,
information
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 on other media
also
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 possesses reliability. In conclusion, in spite of the view that
newspaper
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 is more reliable from those opposed, I deem
internet
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 and TV to be
better media
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a better media
 to gain
information
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 and news.
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