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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Some individuals think doctors are more important than inventors to society. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 view, because
firstly
, many new things were not created by doctors and
secondly
, the
improvment
a change for the better; progress in development
improvement
 of doctors
to
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in
of
 the
world
 is limited. All
lastest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
 inventions of each era are created by inventors. Inventors can observe the
world
in
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with
 a special view and they combine the different resources and change them into a new objective. Those different products contribute to
human's
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human
 society significantly. If there
is
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are
 no inventors existed in the
world
, people's
live
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lives
 will not be developed.
For example
, lights, steam boats and aircrafts are all invented by those people which improve our life obviously. Some of them could be doctors, but all of them are all famous inventors.
In addition
, the contributions from doctors are just existed in a period. Some people could argue that the many doctors focus on the research of the theoretical basis, their contributions to the
world
 could not be marked.
However
, the doctor degree
is just established
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has just been established
 in the modern educational system. In the long period of the
human's
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human
 history, there is no doctor in every subject.
In other words
, doctors' contributions are only existed in the recent hundreds of years.
For instance
, paper-making technique,
compass and pen
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the compass and pen
are
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is
benefitical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 to the
world
 significantly, and there
is
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are
 no doctors in that period. In conclusion,
although
 doctors are advantageous to the
world
, I strongly disagree with that they are more important to the society than inventors, because inventors make the all things that we need in people's modern life and they their contributions to the
world
 accompany with the whole people's history.
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