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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

#people #centres #weekend #markets
It is often said that Sampheng Market has a lot of
thing
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things
 to buy. One
such
 example is that we can buy
bag
such
 as popular Choth
bag
 comfortable Adidas
bag
 and nice
lyn
a formation of people or things one beside another
line
link
bag
.
Also we
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Also, we
 can buy clothes
such
 as easy-to-wear T-shirt
,
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 sexy sing
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 comfortable skirt and smart jacket.
Besides we
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Besides, we
 can buy foods
such
 as delicious coconut
smooties
someone with an assured and ingratiating manner
smoothies
, refreshing Fruit, yummy beef noodle
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,
 various
candy
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candies
, spicy papaya, mango with sweet sauces, cola
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,
 coconut ice-cream
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 rice
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 Cheese French Fried and Orange juice. One of the most striking features is that we can do activities at Sampheng Market
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That is
 to say
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 we can take
picture
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pictures
 of my best family
,
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,
bueatyful
delighting the senses or exciting intellectual or emotional admiration
beautiful
 views
,
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 variety foods
,
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,
 peaceful place Chiness
tample
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 bright star
,
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 nice moon
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 and A lot people
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 Later we can do exercises
such
 as jogging, jumping
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,
 bicycle
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 going sightseeing and railing with
mortorcars
a motor vehicle with four wheels; usually propelled by an internal combustion engine
motorcars
.
Additionally we
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Additionally, we
 can do service-minded activities
such
 as cleaning the road
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 and sweeping the Streets. It is a well-known fact that we can
buying
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buy
 supplies at Sampheng Market One instance could be because cheap stuff. Apart
form
a giver or sender
from
this
 is the market is well-known for public.
Finally
,
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 we can travel to market because of convenient travel.
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