IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the Landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter explain why you are writing ask for the return of your deposit inform the landlord of possible legal action

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Dear Smith, Hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my concern regarding the refundable deposit that I paid before starting the rental contract in your apartment. At the time of the contract signing, it was discussed that the deposit would be fully refunded if the flat
will be
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 returned in good condition. As part of your inspection in the
last
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 week, you did not find any damage or issue with the flat. So, I could not see any reason for holding my deposit for so long and
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, would request you to please send it as soon as possible. I had discussed the matter with my private lawyer and got to know about my rights.
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 , thinking of solving it on a good note only as you have treated me like a family member, and it really means a lot to me. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours sincerely, Payal

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task achievement
You might consider providing a specific deadline for the return of your deposit to add urgency to your request.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on one clear idea to enhance clarity. For example, consider separating your discussion about legal rights into its own paragraph.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is very effective for communication.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear, with an appropriate greeting and closing, making it easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refundable deposit
  • rental agreement
  • amicably
  • tenancy
  • diligently maintained
  • legal proceedings
  • inspect
  • wear and tear
  • withhold
  • non-compliance
  • promptly
  • documented evidence
  • liability
  • small claims court
  • tenants' rights
  • non-negotiable
  • deadline
  • escalation
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