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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010
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The bar graph illustrates
about
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interest
to
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 charity from British people by each heart range only the years 1990 and 2010. In 1990,
heart
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the heart
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 between 36 to 50 have the highest
to
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assistance
more
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than another. activity between 51 to 65
have
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subsidy
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, approximately 35
rate
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rates
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. The latest to help is maturity between 18 to 25 have almost 17
fee
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fees
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. And youth between 26 to 35 and over 65 have
subscription
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subscriptions
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 approximately equal
31
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 to 32 proportion.
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 maturity between 51 to 65 is higher too. Charity more than another. Youth between 36 to 50 have decreased from 1990 a year have approximately 42
ratio
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 to 35
chunk
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chunks
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. activity between 36 to 50 and over 65 have an equal 35 ratio. Old age between 18 to 25 in 2010 have a lot of decrease from 17
ratio
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ratios
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 to 7 proportion.
Overall
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, bequest in1990 growth between 18 to 50
have
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 increased to allowance more than 2010 years. But,
heart
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hearts
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 between 51 to over 65 in 1990 have endowment less
more
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apply
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than in 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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