Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others think that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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After students finish their high school they have to make a decision whether they need to work or continue with higher education. Some believe that there are more benefits to carry on their education, I agree with the statement of getting an occupation straight after their high school. To start with, there are some factors that point out if we continue with our higher study there are more opportunities in the future.

For example

, if you want to be a doctor or lawyer one can not become with a certain university study.It is undeniable that students can have more knowledge and they will be received a certification which can be used for applying for a profession. Therefor, college or high school institution plays a major role.

On the other hand

, I believe students should get jobs right after high institute graduation.

Firstly

, they will earn extra cash as well as make them more independent.

Secondly

, they can gain more experiences in the real world and learn some practical life skills related to what profession they choose. To illustrate, if you were an engineer and you needed to fix a bicycle, you would have a chance to have more fixing experiences than what you learn about it at the institution.

Therefore

, young people who start to industry after finishing studying at institute may be promoted and become a successful person in their future career. To summarize, higher schooling do provide with high knowledge, but some time make a wrong decision on a career choice but having a industry experience even as a starter or intern will help them to make a choice before starting their career and if they do choice to follow the same teaching as their occupation

then

they would succeed in their future as they would have allready reallife work experience

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

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Academic qualifications
Specialized skills
In-depth knowledge
Personal growth
Social development
Practical experience
Financial independence
Career progression
Professional networking
Education
Work experience
Successful career
Personal interests
Career goals
Decision-making process

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