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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, many people read less and less and tend to do enjoyable activities with children more because playing has more fun in it and people think doing an interesting activity with a
child
 can
increase
 their abilities and
creativity
. I agree with
that but
Accept comma addition
that, but
however
, there
are
Suggestion
is
 something that can only get from reading. It’s very important to do enjoyable activities with a
child
such
 as reading or playing. Because
first
 of all, doing these kind of things may
increase
 your ability
on
Suggestion
of
 communication or teaching. That are skills that you can’t learn from a book. Plus, these abilities are very useful whether in your daily life or future jobs.
Last
 but not least, doing entertaining things with a
child
 can
also
increase
 your
creativity
. When you’re playing with a
child
, you will think lots of games or even create one to play with the
child
. What’s more, children tend to be more creative so you can be affected by the children during
play time
time for play or diversion
playtime
.
However
, there are always some knacks that you can only learn from a book.
To begin
 with, reading a book can
increase
 your faculty on finding materials from books efficiently. What’s more, reading books can
also
increase
 our concentration while doing something, the ability of understanding things and the faculty of memory. In my opinion, doing fun things with a
child
 can develop better skills and
creativity
, because when you are doing pleasurable things with a
child
 can
also
increase
 your capability
on
Suggestion
of
 dealing with different type of people. If you can get along with a
child
 as a teenager or an adult, you can
dealing
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deal
 with different people with different character. All in all, I think both reading books and doing
amusing
surprising greatly
amazing
 things with
child
Suggestion
children
a child
 is important, you can leave either of these two.
However
, doing amusing activities can improve
creativity
 and some specific skills better than reading books.
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