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Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome the stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays life is stressful and
people
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 try to comfort themselves in any way possible. I absolutely disagree with a number of psychologists who say that individuals should do nothing in a part of each
day
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 to beat
stress
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 because of issues with
time
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 and effectiveness. Most
people
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 today have no
time
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 in their daily lives to spend doing nothing. They have to wake up early each morning, go to work for at least eight to ten hours, and spend the rest of the
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 dealing with other routine issues
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 as other jobs they do, the problems of their family members and so on. All of these things take up so much
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 and there is no
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 left for them to avoid doing anything.
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, doing nothing does not actually help resolve the causes of
stress
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. When a person rests and does nothing, he does not deal with what is causing him to become stressed,
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 as the household chores he has not done yet, homework for school or college, or arguments with others. So when he goes back to his normal life, he realizes that those issues are still real and have not changed. He
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 realizes that he has lost some of the
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 he could have spent dealing with them, which can cause even more
stress
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. Some may argue that doing nothing gives the brain
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 to relax and recover, which helps it to become more efficient in dealing with stressful situations and problems.
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,
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 have enough
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 to relax and recover during the night when they sleep, so it is not necessary to spend more
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 resting during the
day
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. In conclusion, I believe it is not a good idea for
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 to allocate some
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 every
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 to doing nothing in order to decrease
stress
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 since they do not have enough
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 for
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 and it does not deal with the causes of
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