The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts compare the
number
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of
graduate
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and postgraduate
students
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in the
UK
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without getting to full-time
work
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in four different categories.
Overall
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, in both groups of
students
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,
while
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Further
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study and part-time
work
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were by far the most popular selections, the
number
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of
students
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participating in voluntary
work
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was the lowest in
four
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the four
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categories surveyed. It is noticed that the
number
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of
graduate
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students
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significantly
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is significantly
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higher than that of
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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. In 2008, approximately 17700
graduate
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students
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were attracted by
part-time
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a part-time
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job
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jobs
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, which was over sevenfold than that of postgraduate
students
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. Compare to part-time
work
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, nearly 30000
UK
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graduates chose to enrol in
further
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study, a difference of roughly 12000
students
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. Meanwhile, the
number
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of
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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in the
UK
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took
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who took
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part in
this
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segment was 2725
students
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, which
200
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was 200
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higher than that of
part-time
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a part-time
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job
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jobs
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and only was
a
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apply
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nine of those
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graduate
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. In the same period surveyed,
the
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considerably lower
number
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of
students
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doing voluntary
work
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or without
work
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was
a
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apply
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witness
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witnessed
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in both groups of
students
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in the
UK
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.
Whereas
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, the quantity of unemployed
graduate
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students
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was 16235, the figures for postgraduate
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were
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nearly ten times lower.
Similarly
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, the
number
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of
graduate
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work
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on a voluntary was noticeably higher than that of its counterparts,
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at 3500 and 345 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduate, students, uk, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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