Write a letter to your friend who just moved to a new home with is family, Tell him you are sending a present to him The nature of the present Why you chose the present How you would send it

Dear David, How are you? I hope

this

letter finds you in good health and spirit.My heart was filled with great joy when I got the news that you have relocated to a new home together with your family. I am sending you a gift and I am sure you would find it valuable. I am sending you a brand new wall clock.It was manufactured in Germany. It is black in colour with some

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design. It has a light bulb that automatically switches on

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night.It

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has an inbuilt battery and a spare battery. I chose

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present because it has 5 inbuilt small chambers that

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you the opportunity to set to any five different time zones of your choice across the globe. I would be sending it by mail. I have made an enquiry at the post office in my area. It would be delivered to your location in two weeks. I can't wait to hear from you. Yours Sincerely, David

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0Word repetition
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8 paragraphs

167 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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