Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people have a mindset that watching events like the World Cup or Olympics on television motivate the grown ups to

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

daily. While some do not agree and believe that there are many other ways which can get them to

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

. In my essay I will discuss both the points and conclude by giving my opinion.

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, I will explain the idea of people getting encouraged to stay fit by watching sports on TV. I believe the athletes taking part in

such

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events are fit and they take very good care of themselves by going to the gym daily. Many of these sportsmen are role models to people. They share their eating habits and the daily routine on social media, news channel interviews. People consider them as a benchmark for fitness.

For example

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, the famous Indian cricketer Virat Kohli has millions of fans on Instagram of which my brother is

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one of them.He shares pictures of

hiim

that male; objective male pronoun

him

working out

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tips and tricks for how to exercise and remain fit. People get influenced a lot of

such

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things which eventually gives them motivation to

workout

Suggestion

work out

On the other hand

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, there are people who don't like watching sports and find other reasons to stay fit. People going for a 9 to 6 job by sitting at one place believe that they don't do any physical work the entire day, so the fear of having health issues keeps them self-motivated to

workout

Suggestion

work out

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, in my office building, there's a gym where many of my colleagues burn their fats after

working

Suggestion

work

hours.

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, there are young people in their mid 20's and are looking to get married.

Such

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folks believe to get a prominent better half they need to stay fit by exercising. In my conclusion, I would like to say that it depends on person on person what they prefer. Some like to watch sports which they think will encourage them to

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

, while some believe they can self-motivate themselves and stay fit. There's a saying 'Where there's a will, there's a way!' In my opinion, we don't need to follow any sports to stay healthy. If a person is concerned about its health, it will take measures

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to stay fit.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

373 words

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Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

As a part of their education, many students work at a company for a short period of time without a salary. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to this?

Some people think the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that air travelshould be restricted because it causes serious pollution and up the world's fuel resources. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?