Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Many people have a mindset that watching events like the World Cup or Olympics on television motivate the grown ups to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
daily. While some do not agree and believe that there are many other ways which can get them to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
. In my essay I will discuss both the points and conclude by giving my opinion.
Firstly
, I will explain the idea of people getting encouraged to stay fit by watching sports on TV. I believe the athletes taking part in
such
events are fit and they take very good care of themselves by going to the gym daily. Many of these sportsmen are role models to people. They share their eating habits and the daily routine on social media, news channel interviews. People consider them as a benchmark for fitness.
For example
, the famous Indian cricketer Virat Kohli has millions of fans on Instagram of which my brother is
also
one of them.He shares pictures of
hiim
that male; objective male pronoun
him
working out
,
Accept space
,
tips and tricks for how to exercise and remain fit. People get influenced a lot of
such
things which eventually gives them motivation to
workout
Suggestion
work out
.
On the other hand
, there are people who don't like watching sports and find other reasons to stay fit. People going for a 9 to 6 job by sitting at one place believe that they don't do any physical work the entire day, so the fear of having health issues keeps them self-motivated to
workout
Suggestion
work out
.
For example
, in my office building, there's a gym where many of my colleagues burn their fats after
working
Suggestion
work
hours.
Also
, there are young people in their mid 20's and are looking to get married.
Such
folks believe to get a prominent better half they need to stay fit by exercising. In my conclusion, I would like to say that it depends on person on person what they prefer. Some like to watch sports which they think will encourage them to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
, while some believe they can self-motivate themselves and stay fit. There's a saying 'Where there's a will, there's a way!' In my opinion, we don't need to follow any sports to stay healthy. If a person is concerned about its health, it will take measures
accordingly
to stay fit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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