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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you sug?

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It is often observed in many countries children act misbehaviour in their school. Many reasons of it is clear, and I will briefly suggest some solutions in
this
 essay. The kids who are age group between 7-17 mostly in a bad way explanation in the schools.
That is
 the reason of it, in adolescence, many hormone levels are high in order to fix their body.
Thus
, they cannot control their emotions and not know about limitation of social treatments. Due to over stressed pupils can hit each other or talk with slugs.
For example
, in a local survey is considered about one of the hormones testosterone in male is the main result of being nervous.
That is
 to say, the teenager, sometime can not deal with it in order to keep healthy. The men are angrier than women by how hormones. I suggest that some teacher should take care of students just physiological situation to reduce bad manner.
On the other hand
, many parents cannot spend
time
 to raise kind their pupils. Meanwhile, they cannot learn anything from parents, so they
fell
mat together and make felt-like
felt
 so lonely and they cannot live as a child. To take more responsibility causes stress and bad manner of growing kids. Another measure of it, it can be part
time
 working with one of the parents, so quality
time
 with pupils should decrease their problems in the social life, particularly in schools.
For instance
, some teacher who has educated kinder garden, keep an eye on only more nervous kids to adjust others. When they keep a healthy connection, all students
have will be
Suggestion
have been
were
are being
were being
 calm, relax, tolerant. It is a straightforward measure,
however
 the lecturers, says that the most reasonable precaution. In conclusion, I restate that teenager can be stressful or angry about life or parents by reflecting to the school. Meanwhile, two precautions should be exactly beneficial to increase wellbeing manner. To advice teacher's meticulous caring with spending quality
time
 with family. To
finally
, I completely believe these solutions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • influence of media
  • aggressive behavior
  • overcrowded classrooms
  • inadequate facilities
  • classroom management
  • conflict resolution
  • behavior education
  • parental involvement
  • reinforced at home
  • student psychology
  • learning environment
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