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Nowadays people can use computers to talk, learn and communicate without leaving home. There is a danger that it will cause more isolation and a lack of communication among people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the science and technology progress computers have become an integral part of our
lives
Suggestion
life
. Nowadays we have an opportunity to work and study online from our homes.
Although
 some people think that
this
 situation has a negative influence on our
communicational
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 skills, I myself believe that it is not really true.
First
 of all, we can speak
with
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to
 our friends and bosses using different on-line platforms.
Moreover
, we can even see the people who are on the other part of city, country or even continent.
Thus
, in my opinion, there are much more chances to communicate with people than in the past.
Secondly
, computer era leads our world
to
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of
 globalization. We have got a huge number of chances to make a friendship with people from different countries, we can work from homes for some foreign companies and it doesn’t demand our personal presence in different kinds of offices and other similar institutions.
In addition
, I would like to share my personal experience of using computer for communication with my family. While being abroad, I often call to my parents and friends and I am glad I have an opportunity to see them as often as it possible. I feel we are almost same connected as before, when we met personally. We do know everything about each other and for me, computer and phone are the devices that really help me to communicate with people. In
conclusion I
Accept comma addition
conclusion, I
 would like to
emphasis
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emphasize
 that no matter what, people will always find a way to communicate with others and the new technologies cannot cause
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 inconveniences in
this
 process.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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