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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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To have a healthy- balanced lifestyle, people should start eating fruits and vegetables more often since it has many nutrients which can fulfil the body.
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 consuming
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 on a small scale is needed in one's body. I believe everyone should adopt the idea of converting their
diet
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 to a vegetarian
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. Being a vegetarian can benefit a person in many different ways.
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, fruits and vegetables are cheap and
easily accessed to
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easily accessed
. They can be found everywhere.
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, they maintain many natural vitamins and nutrients. They provide us with fibre, which holds a significant role in the human body. It protects us from any dangerous diseases.
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, being vegetarian can
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 help in protecting the animals' environments. By being vegetarian, we can stop hunting animals for their
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.
This
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 will decrease the amount of animals being endangered.
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, consuming
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 in a small quantity is necessary in order to have a balanced
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.
Meat
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 contains proteins, and other vitamins that can be more beneficial in meats than in vegetables and fruits.
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 one should take precautions on the amount of
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intaken
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
intake
. Eating a lot of
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 can lead to many dangerous diseases like cholesterol and cardiovascular diseases.
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, one should be anxious about the
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 they
eat whether
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eat, whether
 it's contaminated or not, which can bring up viruses, bacterias and more. In conclusion, a healthy
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 is always the best choice which will help maintain a long living life. It may take a while to convert to a vegetarian
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diet but
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diet, but
 the advantages of it outweigh its disadvantages. Indeed, Adopting a vegetarian
diet
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 is more beneficial to everyone.

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