You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •Suggest types of job what would be suitable for him/her

Dear friend, Alireza, Hi, I am happy that you are fine. I am writing in response to your request regarding entering college or going after a job. You could not achieve great scores in the high school exams when we were classmates even though you were a clever person because most of the time you were nagging about the theoretical materials;

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, despite those courses which were not your favourite ones, you were a great fan of practical classes that we had. You were very adroit in

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courses in that every student wanted to be your partner and make a team.

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, you have told me you learned how to repair vehicles from your grandfather, and if my mind serves me well, you were a dextrous mechanic when you were young.

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fact that most of the time in college you have to deal with theoretical courses, I highly recommend you to go after a work in which you enjoy doing practical deeds like being a mechanic or being a TV or electronic devices repairman, occupations in which you are adroit. I am highly thankful that you find me suitable for seeking advice regarding your future life. Please write to me soon. Sincerely yours, Mohammad Reza

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Jun 9, 2025

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coherence and cohesion

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to use simpler sentences to maintain clarity and flow.

task achievement

You provided good specific reasons for your advice.

coherence and cohesion

Your greeting and closing were friendly and appropriate.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

210 words

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