Some people believe that old public buildings in cities should be restored while others say that they should be demolished and new buildings should be built instead. Agree or disagree?

Today’s rate of population
threaten
Suggestion
will threaten
to the basic need of human. So whenever lengthy discussion comes related to the
point
Accept comma addition
point, then
then
debate occurs about the old and new edifices. It is partially agreed that
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
the unplanned and outdated plan buildings should be get
ground level
Suggestion
a ground level
except the case, some historic buildings to be preserved for the coming generation.
Firstly
, Some of the unplanned and without basic
amenities
Suggestion
amenity
building are constructed in the main region in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
a city
. Resulting, occupying more
space making
Accept comma addition
space, making
main obstacle in traffic congestion and over in
long time
Suggestion
a long time
it has been made threat to human lives because of the over life span turned out.
For Example
, The famous Holkar Bridge in Mumbai collapsed in rainy season due to
neglance
failure to act with the prudence that a reasonable person would exercise under the same circumstances
negligence
of their maintenance and life period exceeded in that event several injured and died.
Hence
it is clear that
such
type of building should be ground level before happening misfortune event,
instead
of crate new planned
infrastructure avoid
Accept comma addition
infrastructure, avoid
traffic dilemma
Suggestion
the traffic dilemma
and utilize proper space for living needs.
Secondly
,
Pre historic
Suggestion
Prehistoric
buildings should be conserved for the tourist attraction and making
history
Suggestion
the history
of the country
.
Accept space
.
they
Suggestion
They
are windows to the past. When we restore a building we
area
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
preserving our heritage and part of
history
Suggestion
the history
of that generation.
For Instance
, In Maharashtra number of forts and historical telling building are preserved for the tourist attraction in a way So it
is helps
Suggestion
helps
has helped
to boost
country economy
Suggestion
the country's economy
country's economy
while foreigner comes to know about that place more and more.
In addition
,
government
Suggestion
the government
is
also
attentive take
Accept comma addition
attentive, take
part in
create
Suggestion
creating
vigilance about culture in younger generation mind. It
is helps
Suggestion
helps
has helped
to conserve
culture
Suggestion
the culture
and
history
ever and forever. In summary, Conserving
heritage
Accept comma addition
heritage, history
history
through tourist attraction contribute the
country
Suggestion
country's
economy and
ll
quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class
all
live
example
Suggestion
examples
for
Suggestion
of
the young era ever. In Some minor cases need to demolish old one and reconstruct the well organized plan for
the better
Suggestion
the best
utilization for the public welfare.

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