Some people believe that old public buildings in cities should be restored while others say that they should be demolished and new buildings should be built instead. Agree or disagree?

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Today’s rate of population

threaten

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will threaten

to the basic need of human. So whenever lengthy discussion comes related to the

point

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point, then

then

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debate occurs about the old and new edifices. It is partially agreed that

analyzing

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

analysing

the unplanned and outdated plan buildings should be get

ground level

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a ground level

except the case, some historic buildings to be preserved for the coming generation.

Firstly

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, Some of the unplanned and without basic

amenities

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amenity

building are constructed in the main region in

city

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the city

cities

a city

. Resulting, occupying more

space making

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space, making

main obstacle in traffic congestion and over in

long time

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a long time

it has been made threat to human lives because of the over life span turned out.

For Example

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, The famous Holkar Bridge in Mumbai collapsed in rainy season due to

neglance

failure to act with the prudence that a reasonable person would exercise under the same circumstances

negligence

of their maintenance and life period exceeded in that event several injured and died.

Hence

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it is clear that

such

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type of building should be ground level before happening misfortune event,

instead

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of crate new planned

infrastructure avoid

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infrastructure, avoid

traffic dilemma

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the traffic dilemma

and utilize proper space for living needs.

Secondly

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Pre historic

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Prehistoric

buildings should be conserved for the tourist attraction and making

Use synonyms

history

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the history

of the country

Accept space

they

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They

are windows to the past. When we restore a building we

area

a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters

are

preserving our heritage and part of

Use synonyms

history

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the history

of that generation.

For Instance

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, In Maharashtra number of forts and historical telling building are preserved for the tourist attraction in a way So it

is helps

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helps

has helped

to boost

country economy

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the country's economy

country's economy

while foreigner comes to know about that place more and more.

In addition

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government

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the government

also

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attentive take

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attentive, take

part in

create

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creating

vigilance about culture in younger generation mind. It

is helps

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helps

has helped

to conserve

culture

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the culture

and

history

Use synonyms

ever and forever. In summary, Conserving

heritage

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heritage, history

history

Use synonyms

through tourist attraction contribute the

country

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country's

economy and

quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class

all

live

example

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examples

for

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the young era ever. In Some minor cases need to demolish old one and reconstruct the well organized plan for

the better

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the best

utilization for the public welfare.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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322 words

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Your opinion

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