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It is argued by some people that employees should join the high salary jobs and
this
 will reflect on the stability of their families.
Although
 money is on the priorities for most people who search for new jobs, I believe that it is not the only factor
.
Accept space
.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of high
income
 for the families as well as the impact of other factors on the individuals.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons why the high salary is one of the significant factors when the employee chooses his occupation. One reason is if people earn more money, their families will live secured. A prime example is a good
income
 helps all family members to purchase all assorted types of food.
Moreover
, people can travel abroad for tourism or even to study if they have sufficient financial resources.
Hence
, it is suggested that people should search for jobs with good
income
 which help them to find the safe life they wish.
However
, there are other points which should be in consideration when the one chooses his new
work
.
In other words
, if people have
passion
Suggestion
a passion
 and interest in their
work
, they will continue in positions for several years.
For instance
, individuals
work
 in a friendly environment which enables them to enjoy when they doing the daily tasks of
work
 and show more interest during duty times can be promoted faster and achieving career progress. Having given
this
 example, it is clear that some people do not think that money is not enough factor to choose their jobs. In conclusion, after the essay has shown the benefits of high salaries for
people
Suggestion
person's
 life`s stability and the other factors for choosing jobs. In my opinion, passion, interest and friendly
work
 environment are essential factors when people choose
job
Suggestion
a job
 as well as high
income
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • equip
  • psychological
  • constructively
  • foster
  • empowered
  • isolated
  • escalation
  • multi-faceted approach
  • eradicate
  • peer influence
  • socio-economic status
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