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Many children today are watching too much tv and become less active rather than in the past What are the reasons of this and what can be done to solve

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It is true to say that the amount of children watching television today is increasing rapidly comparing to the past resulting in reduction in children's physical activeness. Today's society's busy parents can be
blomed
expletives used informally as intensifiers
blamed
 for
this
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 situation and if, could be tackled by promoting children to be members sports
cente
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
chant
. Nowadays, parents seem to be so busy
thay
pointing out something
that
 they could not pay attention enough to children's daily life. Since, some
workoholic
person with a compulsive need to work
workaholic
 parents at work during the day they may want their children to be at home safety
.
Accept space
.
This
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 could urge children watch TV more as a pastime.
On the other hand
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,
Accept space
,
watching television as a hobby for children can come hardly for those families who have financial problems.
In other words
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,
parents
Suggestion
the parents
 themselves may inspire their child to watch TV to kill his or
him
male possessive pronoun
his
 time
instead
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 of going to any
sport
Suggestion
sports
 clubs. Parents as well as
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 are claimed to have a responsibility to inspire children to try
pyhsical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
 activities.
First
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 of all, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 could play a role in
this
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 by
constracting
make by combining materials and parts
constructing
contracting
contacting
 new sports centres or providing them with
hightech
Suggestion
high tech
 facilities. Parents could
,
Accept space
,
in
tern
a circular segment of a curve
turn
, spend their time with their child,
may be
by chance
maybe
 by organising family trips by cycling. They can
also
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 set on example for children playing sports activities. To conclude
,
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,
it is usually argued that these days children are watching television too much than those in the past.
This
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 has a negative impacts on the children's levels of activity.
Although
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 parents claimed to be guilty in that condition
this
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 could be reduced by stimulating them to play active
activitires
any specific behavior
activities
.
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