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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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To begin
 with, the rewards are needed everyone and they are important in order to improve someone. Personally, I think that the most of rewards should be given to students. I agree that students perform better when they are rewarded rather than punished, and it will be explained why. On the one hand, there are many reasons that rewarding students are greater
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 punishing. One of them is following, human love the hearing positive words from others, especially, students, because every word that teachers talk to students will affect their behaviour.
In addition
, students which receive rewards (like a certificate), from a teacher will perform better and do their best.
Furthermore
, rewards will motivate them to be a perfect and responsible in something.
Likewise
, students self-confident will increase day by day.
On the other hand
, punishing students
then
 reward them cause of negative experience in childhood or at a young age. At the same time, students who are punished will not go to school again, in order to do not hear punishing from teachers again.
For instance
, some students are embarrassed when they are making a mistake or fail in object that lead to them do not have knowledge.
Furthermore
, it will effect to their future lifestyle or finding a professional job. Afterwards, they can be a society problem like a thief, who will punish mutually in answer. To sum up all above mentioned opinions, suggestions, it is obvious that students will perfect at something or perform better when they are rewarded rather than punished.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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