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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Nowadays, we have access to
many options
Suggestion
the many options
 that we ever had before. Some people agree on
this
, others do not. We will discuss both views before we reach a conclusion. On the one hand, Those
wo
plural of "I"
we
who
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that we have less options now than before, point to the fact that due to the increase in prices of rent, people do not have other options but to live in a
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 with low rent.
Conseuqently
Suggestion
Consequently
, they
can not
can not
cannot
 send their children to a prestigious
schools
Suggestion
school
 of their choices.
In addition
, high paid jobs will require certain courses which they
can not
can not
cannot
 afford, which will limit their educational options. They say, with some merit, that some people was born with fewer options
as a result
 of financial hardships of their families. They have less options when it comes to choosing their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, schools and jobs.
By contrast
, supporters of
this
 idea that more options are available now, state that technology enables people to educate themselves, as there are many courses available online to choose from.
Moreover
, Thanks to the new technology, many people have the option study online and work online as well.
Finally
, globalization
make
Suggestion
makes
 the world a small village, it is easier for people to move to a different country to work or to study, which increased their options in a remarkable way. Overall, it appears to me that the stronger arguments are in favour of having many options today than ever before, and many people have access to those options.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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