You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter, say: • what the content of the music concert is • where and when the music concert is • why you think your friend should go to this concert

Dear Mandy, I hope you are enjoying your days! I have been thinking about you a lot and wanted to shoot you a message. I'm pleased to inform you that I have decided to go to a concert which is going to be held on upcoming weekend. Fortunately, I purchased one ticket for myself and received another one at
discount
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a discount
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and the good news is the concert is going to be performed by one of your favourite and
compelling
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most compelling
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celebrities and
also
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as I have mentioned the concert is
this
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weekend so we both have unlimited time to make our day memorable and full of funs. Let's plan to meet up soon and later be it over a coffee, a virtual hangout or maybe even a spontaneous road trip.
Also
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, I would like to insist you
to
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apply
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stay with me at my residential place, since we are going to see each other after a so long time I have a lot of gossip to do with you and I am excited to show you my latest car collection. Sending you a lot of best wishes and love. Rav.

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task achievement
Try to clearly state the details of the concert, such as the artist's name and the specific location, to enhance the content.
coherence and cohesion
Consider structuring the letter more clearly with separate paragraphs for each topic to improve flow.
suitable writing tone
The friendly tone and personal touch make the letter engaging and inviting.
complete response
You did well to mention the excitement of seeing each other after a long time, which adds to the invitation's appeal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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