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Crime rate , in most of countries , is often higher in urban areas than rural areas .why you think that us? Give solution to reduce the crime rate .

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The rate of crime has shown a northward movement all over the world.
However
,
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,
in the majority of nations, the crime rate is more in cities than countryside areas.Though
,
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,
there are multiple reason
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
 for
this
 phenomenon.I feel unemployment and
drug
 abuse are the most common reason.
This
 essay intends to discuss these reasons, though briefly, and set of solution is suggested to curb
this
 grave concern. Unemployment is considered as the main reason of growing crimes in favoured parts of
country
Suggestion
the country
.In
these days cities
Suggestion
cities these days
 have become overpopulated
.
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.
Even more
wrose
(comparative of 'bad') inferior to another in quality or condition or desirability
worse
 people who live in
backword
at or to or toward the back or rear
backward
backwards
 areas are migrating to these areas in
expectation
Suggestion
the expectation
 of higher
renumeration
something that remunerates
remuneration
 for their work.
Conversly
Suggestion
Conversely
, owing to
large number
Suggestion
a large number
the large number
 of
people these regions
Suggestion
people in these regions
 are unable to provide work to all people.
As a result
, people commit illegal activities for earning their livelihood.Apart from
this
,
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,
vast number
Suggestion
vast numbers
a vast number
 of cities' people are
drug
 addicted. Urban areas are being
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
 by
drugdealer
Suggestion
drug dealer
 for smuggling as here they can target large number of people.
Therefore
,
fullfing
put in effect
fulfilling
 their
drug
 requirements
,
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,
people
involves
Suggestion
involve
 themselves in various crimes
such
 as
buglary
entering a building unlawfully with intent to commit a felony or to steal valuable property
burglary
burglaries
, murder and many more. Like
,
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,
 every key
of
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to
 lock,
this
 problem,
too has
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too, has
nemerous
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
 feasible solutions.
Govenment
Suggestion
Government
 needs to generate ample job
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
.To cite an example, establishing new business policies which
aids
Suggestion
aid
unemlpoyed
not engaged in a gainful occupation
unemployed
 to commence a business.Another way is,
judicial
Suggestion
judicially
 set stringent sentence for culprits.Since, it will work as a lesson for criminals and others.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, rehabilitation should be provided to criminals in prison.
Last
 but not the least, welfare
campagian
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
campaigning
 needs to be conducted which attuned people about the ill-effects of
drug
 addiction. In conclusion, I believe,
altough
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 lack of jobs as well as drugs
are
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is
 the
readin
the cognitive process of understanding a written linguistic message
reading
raiding
 behind
this
 issue; certain
action
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action, such
such
 as employment policy, strict punishments, and awareness among people help to tack
this
 offence activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anonymity
  • social cohesion
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • desperation
  • urban stressors
  • mental health
  • community policing
  • job opportunities
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • public spaces
  • surveillance cameras
  • deterrent
  • recidivism
  • reintegration programs
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