Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Crime

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is a serious problem across the globe and all countries are trying to deal with

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pressing issue. A section of the society

believe

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believes

that

prison

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sentences for a

longer

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long

duration can help to reduce the

crime

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, whilst others disagree and argue that there are other better ways to solve

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essay agrees with the argument that alternative

ways

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ways, such

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as educating people and giving them resources to earn are far more beneficial than confining them to a

prison

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cell.

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essay will discuss both points of view. There are a number of people who think that offenders should be punished with

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long

prison

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sentences because

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phenomenon can invoke / generate fear in a criminal’s mind.

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, if a person is already aware of the intensity of punishment before committing any

crime

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, it will discourage him from becoming a criminal.

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, in the UAE, the rapist and the murderer usually get lifetime

prison

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sentences, resulting in making people think twice before committing any serious

crime

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, imposing strict punishment deters people from committing

crime

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, I believe that alternative

ways

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ways, such

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as providing proper

education

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facilities and

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facilities, and

employment can solve the issues far more effectively and I agree with them. Sufficient

education

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and job

opportunities keep the

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opportunities to keep the

masses busy and nobody will try to commit any offence.

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, people / citizens will have some goals in their lives to

fulfill

put in effect

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, which keeps them away from negative thoughts. To exemplify, in Sweden

education

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is free for everyone and the country’s authority is continuously working for more employment options.

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the reason why Sweden tops the list of peaceful countries. In conclusion, longer

prison

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terms certainly instill fear in the minds of potential criminals and discourage them from committing

crime

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, eradicating the root cause of

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by providing

education

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and employment opportunities is a better option.

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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Your opinion

In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed. In which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion ?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

Every country should have a free health service; even if that means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree with this statement?