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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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People should stick to a
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meat
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-free
diet
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 because the high consumption of
meat
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 can
cause
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 severe illnesses and damage to the human body.
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this
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 topic has been controversial lately
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.
However
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,
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,
 I believe that being
meat
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 free isn't the ideal solution for
health
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 issues. Being vegetarian can be a better alternative
diet
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 for both our physical
health
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 and our
planet but
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planet, but
 it couldn't be without its own risks.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 of all
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,
sticking to
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meat
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-free
diet
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 can lead to low
vitamin
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 D
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although
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Although
vitamin
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 d can come from plant based sources,
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 a certain type of
vitamin
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 D (
vitamin
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 D3) can only come through
meat
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 based diets or balanced diets.
Second
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,
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,
 calcium and iron levels will drop down eventually. Low iron levels could
cause
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anemia
a deficiency of red blood cells
anaemia
 which is highly experienced by vegans and vegetarians.
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 to physical problems
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,
vegetarians
also
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 are highly affected
with
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by
 being exposed to mental issues more than
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 eaters.
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,
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 the rate of experiencing digestion problems is
high
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higher
 among vegetarians.In spite of
health
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 problems caused by
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meat
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-free
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diet it
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diet, it
 doesn't mean that it is bad for short terms.
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, it can
cause
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 future problems if stuck to for a long term.
On the contrary
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,
meat
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 is essential in a balanced
diet
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. It has high amounts of nutrients
such
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 as fibre, protein and calcium are found in
meat
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 which is extremely essential to keep a person energetic throughout the day.
Moreover
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,
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,
meat
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 has many benefits that serve the human body.
To begin
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 with, a non vegetarian
diet
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 can help in blood sugar control
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,
bone strength, and muscle maintenance.
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in
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In
 addition
,
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,
meat
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 is the only natural source of
Vitamin
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B12 which
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B12, which
 helps
in
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with
 brain function and development.
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 it can
cause
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 some
health
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 problems when being cooked in the wrong way it helps increase a person's immune system. Despite its importance, it
alsoalso
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also also
 tastes so good. To recapitulate, both
meat
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 and
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meat
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-free
diet
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 can
cause
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 different
health
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 issues if consumed on a long-term period. I highly disagree with
this
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 notion. I believe that converting to a vegetarian
diet
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 is not better because every
diet
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 has both its advantages and disadvantages. Sticking to a balanced
diet
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 is the ideal solution.

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