Some people believe that governments should spend money on improving public transport rather than building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Every year, governments must decide whether to widen the roads that drivers want or to invest in the buses and trains that most of them do not use.
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I accept that new highways help in rural areas, I largely agree that public transport deserves the greater share of spending, because it carries more people at lower cost and causes far less harm to cities.
Body paragraph 1
Admittedly, the case for building highways is not without merit. In the countryside, a bus service cannot reach every village, so a good road is often the only link to a hospital or a school. In the Atlas region of Morocco,
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, routes paved over the past decade have cut the journey to the nearest clinic from hours to minutes. Closely linked to
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is the freedom that private cars offer, since a family with young children or a worker carrying tools cannot easily manage on a crowded train.
Body paragraph 2
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, in the cities where most people live, wider motorways have repeatedly failed to reduce congestion. The main reason is that extra lanes simply attract extra cars, and,
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, the traffic returns within a few years
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the noise and pollution remain.
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, a single tram line carries as many passengers as several lanes of highway at a fraction of the cost. Casablanca,
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, cut travel times across the city after opening its tramway,
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the ring roads built in the same period are already blocked at rush hour. Money spent on rail and bus networks,
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, brings lasting benefits that asphalt cannot match.
Conclusion
In conclusion, new roads remain necessary where no alternative exists, yet in urban areas, they only create more traffic. On balance, governments should give priority to public transport, which serves more citizens, costs less over time and leaves cities cleaner and quieter.

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Your view is clear from the start and stays the same to the end. Keep doing this. You say that new roads can help in the country, but that public transport should get more money in cities.
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Your main ideas are well explained: public transport can move more people, cost less over time, and make cities cleaner. The road point is also fair and helps show that you see both sides.
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Your examples fit your points well. To make the essay even stronger, make clear that the facts in each example are true and easy to check, or use a more general example if you are not sure.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is very easy to follow. Each part has one clear job: your view, the case for roads, the case for public transport, and your final view.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “Admittedly”, “Nevertheless”, “Moreover”, and “therefore”. Keep using links only when they show a real step in the idea, as you do here.
coherence and cohesion
The end sums up your main view clearly without adding a new idea. This gives the essay a strong close.
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The answer deals with both roads and public transport, then gives a clear view on where most public money should go.
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The point about more road space bringing more cars is well explained and directly supports your main view.
coherence and cohesion
The move from rural needs to city needs is smooth and logical.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing match well, so the whole essay feels complete.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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