Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
It is commonly said that today’s institutional opportunities, especially in developing countries. Now, more than ever,
children
are pressurized as were yesterday’s adults. That’s true in the sense that children
are facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening simply because of the ever increasing
demands of life, from the same perspectives, on humans in general. Add a hyphen
ever-increasing
While
it is important that children
excel in
their age to become successful as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a balance between material and psychological growth. As the global village becomes more and more competitive Change preposition
at
everyday
, it becomes important for us to prepare for the fight, so to speak, earlier and earlier. Replace the word
every day
This
is realized by all, which triggers societies to push their juveniles during their learning stage. The other thing that is
contributing to this
ever rising
pressure on Add a hyphen
ever-rising
children
is the lackChange preposition
of
children
are having to race each other for reaching
the privilege of higher education. Change preposition
to reach
While
healthy competition is helpful for the psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race becomes more prominent than the objective. Of course
the objective of Add a comma
course,
children
competing against each other ideally is Change preposition
to brining
brining
the best out of themselves. But, very frequently, a child is compelled to compete Correct your spelling
bringing
for becoming
better than the other. Change preposition
to become
In other words
, the competition becomes a brawl rather than being
a sprint. To stop Unnecessary verb
apply
such
spiteful struggle among our young, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental institutions, such
as schools and colleges. Students must contest for academic betterment, not social supremacy. Also
, parents should get proactively involved in promoting sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their own vengefulness in the lives of their children
. To sustain such
social reformation the government must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success. 32 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLES - Band 9 The conclusion here is simple. The children
today are being put into a ‘survival-of-thefittest
’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do their best. Correct your spelling
survival-of-the fittest
Such
untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more antagonistic. Therefore
we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion