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There are many media can make communicate information like books, radio, TV, film and theater.

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There are many media that can make
communicate
Suggestion
communicating
information
, but some these ineffective to transfer the thought truly,
on the other hand
, some that beneficial to reveal and represent the
information
 to people.
First
 of all, media is important in our lives to put knowing in mind of people, but we need to certain that media is appropriate for the event and comfortable
for
Suggestion
to
 act and depict what we need to watch or hear. Comics are one of the media to communicate
information
 to society, but not all new can be achieved from comics,
for example
, in science news or education can't be to represent in comics.
In contrast
, the books are effective in science essay, because no anyone can read books that relevant
for
Suggestion
to
in
 the education field, as
for example
. Films and theatres are ones of media, but these media in the entertainment field, especially, we don't depend on film to know the current news, but can we get
information
 about the
Second
 World War from films that appeared the war happened in the twentieth century.
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