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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music
 is part of life. In today’s world
music
 has a big impact on peoples' lives. Traditional
music
 of a country is based on culture as International
music
 follows the people's interest and much more. We need
music
 in our life because it helps to express feelings. Traditional
music
 which is “Indian Classical” in my country, totally based on our culture.
Music
Suggestion
The music
 carries Indian history as well as a great king and their kingdom information. Example “Powada” contains courage stories of great kings. Indian classical
music
 plays main roles in Indian knowledge about
music
. Traditional
music
also
 describes the lifestyle of people, which helps archaeologists to study history. Instruments used indicate technology they are familiar with.
For example
 Mrudung, Tabla, Tambora etc. These are Indian classical instruments. International
music
 evolved with new technology. Like EDM, Autotune effects, editing and mixing sounds simultaneously to have new creations. Mainly focused on people’s interest. Nowadays, the
music
 industry is more towards making profit. Some creators follow traditional ways, but they are less in number. Apart from
this
 they mainly cover day to day situations, which involve people more.
This
 is the main reason for the popularity. Everyone has their own taste in
music
. We need traditional
music
 to carry our history and international
music
 to have greater involvement in
music
. As per me, Traditional
music
 is important to carry forward to the
next
 generation so they can understand our ancient heritage and culture. For passion and enjoyment we can listen and follow international
music
 too.

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