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In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Family is an essential place where children can live, grow and continue their growth. In the past, it was a common view that a family had about ten or twelve children who lived together in a house. When people talk about a family, it is likely people think of how many family members are and how the way of their activity is. I think there must be some benefits to have as large as the family in the past. In many countries, living together with more than five or ten children was a popular status in a society and a prestige for most parents in the past. Some parents thought that the more children they had, the more fortunes and happiness would come.
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, sharing
life
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 with a large family often had not brought a pleasure
life
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 for a child.
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, when a child asked money for paying tuition fee, their father got excuses because he did not have any money to pay, so the children got less and less often, and eventually they got altogether.
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, children who stayed with
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 family were very reared to enjoy their quality of
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.
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, children do not have any imagination to have a big family recently. Children think that when they are get a marriage and become a parent, they tend to have just two or three children, so they can go to work and increase
life
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 quality, and afford the fortunes.
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, Parents can buy their children some modern gadgets, go to get a holiday, and pay higher education.
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, living in a small family is a novelty, I have seen some small families often get lonely at home, especially when get a celebration day. In my view, the best way to live is together with a whole family member, and a pleasure time is when all family members can share openly with each other.
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, in the modern world, the best education and quality
life
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 outweigh the essential of
life
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 needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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