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When a country develop its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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When the technology of one country improves, the typical abilities finished.
Hence
, it is not necessary to continue with
this skills
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these skills
this skill
.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement, for the reason that there are some works that never will be able to replace for machines
such
 as psychologists, politicians and teachers. The development of technology is a great input for a nation, because it allows to enhance our quality of life. The scientific advances are essential for having
a
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an
 easier life,
also
this
help
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helps
 with jobs that have abilities repetitive and easy to replace.
For example
, robot vacuum cleaners are a good invention for clean the house.
Therefore
, it is not necessary to hire a maid for tidy the home,
thus
 it is possible to save money.
On the other hand
, some professions
cannot be replace
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cannot replace
cannot be replaced
 for the
technology
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technological
 advance,
such
 as psychologists, politicians and teachers.
Hence
, the abilities that imply those works will never finish. Those skills are the comprehension, the understand of behaviour, and the ability to help to people, according their context.
For example
, I cannot imagine a robot as a psychologist try to give some advice to the population. In conclusion,
traditionals
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
 skills should be
keep
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kept
, despite
development
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the development
 of
science
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scientific
 advance.
However
, in some works is very useful in which their abilities are
repetive
repetitive and persistent
repetitive
 and easy to replace. Meanwhile, in other jobs are impossible die out their skills as a teacher,
for example
, because
this
 career implies features that only a human can do as the emotions.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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