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Some people agree with spending too much money on large wedding while others think it’s a waste of money, what is your opinion?

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A wedding is a cultural and traditional significance of a country. In
past few years
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the past few years
, the wedding industry shows remarkable growth. Some people believe that spend lavishly and freely on weddings is acceptable and some others
thinks
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think
 spending too much
money
 is worthless. On one hand, People believe that spending freely on
marriages it’s
Accept comma addition
marriages, it’s
 a good thing because
with
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in
this
 event their relatives, friends and colleagues are meeting each other with happiness and contentment.
In addition
, they believe that
wedding
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a wedding
 is a one lifetime celebration and it brings closeness to the family.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 they mind not spending lavishly on it. On
other hand
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the other hand
, Some people don’t want to spend
lot
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lots
 of
money
 on it because they are not affluent financially and its burden for them because they borrow lofty loans and spend all the savings on
this
 celebration, after
this
 event their debt will recover in years. It’s like a competition between societies. When someone spends too much
money
 on it, their friends and
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 are compelled to do so. In many
marriages half
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marriages, half
 of the food is wasted, it’s like playing ducks and drakes with
money
. They need to utilize their
money
 for better purposes. To conclude, most of them want lavish weddings because it’s a
onetime
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one time
 event that brings joy and
happiness but
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happiness, but
 in my opinion in spite of spending too much
money
 on it try to marriage in small & simple form.

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