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Many people join distance-learning programs (studys material, post, TV, İnternet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending collages or universities does. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays more and more
people
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 take part
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distance
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 education to study any programs from their home.
However
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, some
people
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 argue that it is not
usefulfor
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useful for
students
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 who
attending
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attend
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 universities or
collages
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colleges
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. I agree that
students
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 see earlier
benefit
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benefits
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who
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when
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 using
a
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apply
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distance
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 learning like those who
going
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go
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 to the
course
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. There are new ways to study
such
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 as online
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course
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courses
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. Studying using new methods
such
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 as either through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 or online courses would be
benefit
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beneficial
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 for
people
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.
Firstly
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,
students
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 do not have to pay
tution
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tuition
 fees, textbook fees and tutorial fees and they save their budget.
Secondly
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,
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the
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online
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course
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courses
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 would be possible with
help
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the help
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 of good speed internet
that
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which
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is
much
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a much
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 cheaper option nowadays.
Moreover
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, the
students
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 are not travelling long
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distance
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distances
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 like
countryside
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the countryside
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,
while
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 the college is in the
midle
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middle
 of a city.
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, if they participate in the online
course
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 both
they
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their
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brain
developing
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development
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 and their
sorround
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surround
surrounds
 is expanding. They make
foregin
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foreign
friends,
therefore
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, it is broadened
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their horizon
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horizon
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horizons
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them
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apply
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.
İn
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In
 addition, when they join
distance
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 learning they manage their time.
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, they have no waste of time in the ways.
Definetely
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Definitely
,
this
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 option is not possible in a traditional study.
On the contrary
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, others have
the
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apply
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conflicting views. As per them, going to the
course
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 is the best method
to
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of
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 learning as
students
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 can learn very well face to face with their teachers.
Moreover
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,
theacher
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the teacher
 can correct and guide their mistakes to overcome all the problems. In
conclude
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,
although
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 face-to-face education is the best method for some
people
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, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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dostance
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distance
 learning
are
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is
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 basic
of
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for
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future
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the future
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.
Thus
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, I still argue
distance
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 learning is
better
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a better
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 option.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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