Many people join distance-learning programs (studys material, post, TV, İnternet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending collages or universities does. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays more and more

people

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take part

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distance

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education to study any programs from their home.

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, some

people

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argue that it is not

usefulfor

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useful for

students

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who

attending

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universities or

collages

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. I agree that

students

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see earlier

benefit

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who

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using

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apply

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distance

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learning like those who

going

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to the

course

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. There are new ways to study

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as online

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course

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. Studying using new methods

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as either through

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the internet

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internet

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or online courses would be

benefit

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for

people

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students

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do not have to pay

tution

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tuition

fees, textbook fees and tutorial fees and they save their budget.

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online

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course

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would be possible with

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of good speed internet

that

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much

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cheaper option nowadays.

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, the

students

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are not travelling long

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distance

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countryside

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the college is in the

midle

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middle

of a city.

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, if they participate in the online

course

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both

they

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brain

developing

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and their

sorround

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surround

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is expanding. They make

foregin

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foreign

friends,

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, it is broadened

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horizon

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them

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İn

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addition, when they join

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learning they manage their time.

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, they have no waste of time in the ways.

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option is not possible in a traditional study.

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conflicting views. As per them, going to the

course

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is the best method

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learning as

students

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can learn very well face to face with their teachers.

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theacher

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the teacher

can correct and guide their mistakes to overcome all the problems. In

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face-to-face education is the best method for some

people

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, in my

opinion

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dostance

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distance

learning

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basic

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future

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, I still argue

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learning is

better

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a better

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option.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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268 words

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Many people join distance-learning programs (studys material, post, TV, İnternet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending collages or universities does. Do you agree or disagree.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.

Now a days people are admiring media and sports stars even though they don’t set a good example. Do you think it is positive or negative development.

Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.