Many people join distance-learning programs (studys material, post, TV, İnternet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending collages or universities does. Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays more and more
people
take part
distance
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education to study any programs from their home.
However
, some
people
argue that it is not
usefulfor
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useful for
students
who
attending
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attend
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universities or
collages
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colleges
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. I agree that
students
see earlier
benefit
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benefits
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who
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when
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using
a
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apply
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distance
learning like those who
going
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to the
course
. There are new ways to study
such
as online
course
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courses
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. Studying using new methods
such
as either through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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or online courses would be
benefit
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beneficial
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for
people
.
Firstly
,
students
do not have to pay
tution
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tuition
fees, textbook fees and tutorial fees and they save their budget.
Secondly
,
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the
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online
course
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courses
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would be possible with
help
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the help
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of good speed internet
that
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which
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is
much
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a much
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cheaper option nowadays.
Moreover
, the
students
are not travelling long
distance
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distances
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like
countryside
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the countryside
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,
while
the college is in the
midle
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middle
of a city.
Finally
, if they participate in the online
course
both
they
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their
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brain
developing
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development
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and their
sorround
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surround
surrounds
is expanding. They make
foregin
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foreign
friends,
therefore
, it is broadened
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their horizon
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horizon
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horizons
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them
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apply
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.
İn
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In
addition, when they join
distance
learning they manage their time.
Thus
, they have no waste of time in the ways.
Definetely
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Definitely
,
this
option is not possible in a traditional study.
On the contrary
, others have
the
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apply
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conflicting views. As per them, going to the
course
is the best method
to
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of
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learning as
students
can learn very well face to face with their teachers.
Moreover
,
theacher
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the teacher
can correct and guide their mistakes to overcome all the problems. In
conclude
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conclusion
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,
although
face-to-face education is the best method for some
people
, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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dostance
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distance
learning
are
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is
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basic
of
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for
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future
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the future
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.
Thus
, I still argue
distance
learning is
better
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a better
the better
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option.
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