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Nowadays more and more people are spending less time at home. Why do you think it happens? What effect does this have on individuals and the society?

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In the modern world, people are showing more interest to spend
time
 outside the house when compare to olden days. Let us see in below conversation how it was going to affect human life and
also
 public as well.
Firstly
, in the present civilization, every individual is spending more than 12 hours of
time
 at their workplace and in balance 12 hours in a day they will have 8 hours of sleep, 2 hours of travelling and
lastly
 they are having 2 hours for their family. Even that two hours of
time
also
 present generation are getting addicted to their gadgets,
finally
 it is affecting the family relations which lead to bad impact on society.
For instance
, parents are not able to give much space to their children and they feel less priority and was effected to their behaviour activities, which was bad to the younger generation and as well as to the society.
Secondly
, one more reason people spending less hours at the house is to earn more for their family needs. As the cost of living is increased a lot compare to past, people has to pay more for their food, housing, education and
also
 for clothing. In order to afford to their family needs, they are spending more life for earning money. Ultimately, it was effecting to their health and family relations. In my view, if we are not able to spend healthy
time
 at home with our family, definitely it will lead to negative impact on the human relations and on the world as well.
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