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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller.

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As seen from the records, it is evident that, most of the individuals are planning holidays now-a-days if we compare it to the past. In
this
 essay I would describe the reason of
this
 increase and
also
 the positive effects of the tourism.
Firstly
, the pressure, that the employees are suffering from their respective jobs. Earlier tourism was not famous in a trend to relax yourself from the intense workload. And
also
, they were not aware of the therapy of relaxation via doing outings. Overall, I would say the lack of information they received due to less availability of the internet to them.
For example
, the plans were very expensive at that time because of which, only a few of the public would afford that. Tourism was like "once in a blue moon" in that period of time.
Secondly
, the extensive competition of the travel websites,
for instance
 "Make my trip" and "Go IBIBO". These are some platforms, but there are many more in the market that advertise themselves regularly with extremely reasonable prices to which viewers attracts and manage to plan a trip from extracting time from their busy schedules.
Moreover
, they
also
 offer free trips sometimes and promo codes to make their customers for future welfare.
Furthermore
, It is beneficial too. It is not a bad idea to get free from your busy life and provide yourself some peace as, it helps you get away from your daily problems and gives you a new life. It is like meditation, to realize your own worth. And, as it
also
 provides you a better health with a fresh mind, I would suggest that everyone must have
this
 activity in their lives consistently.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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