Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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People have different views in terms of getting material. Some people argue that the most effective way in order to obtain data is through social media.
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would argue that it's
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longer the best way to get news. On the one hand, there are many indisputable grounds for arguing that
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are still the most popular among individuals even though we are living in
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globalized world.
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, when the internet began to exist,
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were favourable
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individuals
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, most senior citizens have developed a habit of reading a magazine on a daily basis and they don't want to change their habits.
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,
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are considered
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trustworthy source of data when compared to
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. To take a specific example, most
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are usually written by professional journalists and attentively checked, edited and even censored by local inhabitants.
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social media has become more prevalent and dominant
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opportunities and convenience.
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, readers can access info easily when compared to the old method.
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reason would be all readers have their own devices
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, cell phones and so forth can obtain a huge article in a few clicks.
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, online reading enables readers a great experience, thanks to the constant advancement in technology, which
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possible to upload movies and audio recordings. To take an example, fans of football can watch or download any
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whenever they want via the internet. In conclusion,
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reliable source of news and attracting
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senior citizens,
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have lost their reputation
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the internet, which has more choices and
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accessible than outdated
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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