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young people know about international pop and movie stars but know less about famous historical people. what are the reasons of this trend and what can be done to solve this problem?

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The young are more knowledgeable about the modern celebrities compared to historical ones. In
this
 essay, some reasons attributed to
this
 trend as well as some ways to keep the young generation informed about the famous people of the past will be proposed.
To begin
 with,
this
 trend can be explained in various ways.
Firstly
, the young, today, is obsessed in social media sites
such
 ad Twitter, Facebook and Instagram where they follow the sites of the celebrities like pop and movie stars.
For example
, a recent study by Columbia university found that about 82% of the US teenagers are active
in
Suggestion
on
such
 sites being a regular follower of 15 stars on average.
Thus
, young people are more aware of the current celebrities and in comparison, they have little time to watch historical movies or visiting historical sites and museum which are the source of the past information.
As a result
, it is inevitable that they lack data about the history and be excessively concentrated on the modern stars.
However
, there are
also
 some solutions to inform the young generation about the famous people of the past.
Firstly
, schools should be shouldered great responsibility to accomplish
this
 task. More specifically
such
 institutions should organize meetings with historical scientist, archaeologists, excursions to historic sites. By virtue of
this
, the young can accumulate more information about the historic personages and
also
 develop a liking for history.
In addition
, more and more historical movies should be broadcasted on TV whose fans are mainly consisted of the young. By way of conclusion, imbalance of the knowledge the young possess in terms of celebrities in different period can be attributable to several reasons like excessive focus of young people on social sites and can
also
 be addressed in various ways like increased number of travels and movies about the history

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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