It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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expands the mind"? In my perspective, people who usually trip, look at all situations differently and have more experience about various situations, thereby topic statement has part of the truth.
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, Why statement has only part not full the truth? Inasmuch as people
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with different goals, so sometimes they bring from trip only the photograph.
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, according stories that my friends tell, many resorts have restricted area outside that majority of tourists do not go.
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, sometimes people, especially on ski resorts, arrives at a hotel and do not see anything except a mountain, thereby return only rested.
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, many countries have only entertaining sense, so tourists in
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places do not learn something new.
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, visiting different countries demonstrate people's life with different side that somehow expand knowledge and world view to look on own trouble from another corner.
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, the advertisement shows the only positive side of countries, and people think it is the truth;
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, when they will come there as tourists, understand all countries have many problems similar to own country with a difference how they hide it.
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, people by a journey spreads information about own countries and exchange knowledge with citizens other countries: that allow looking for trouble from other corners and expanding own proficiency.
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, presently, people around the world has capabilities exchange work experience between countries, that expand their professional level. To conclude, I partially agree because people who has educative goals even in own country find methods to do it,
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not always
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allow learning something.
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, at the same time
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help better understand cultures other countries and expand our horizons due to show the same problems from a different view.
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