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An increasing number of people are buying what they need onlone. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shoping online

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Nowadays, the majority of people prefer
buy
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to buy
 online products and
this
 trend is very popular in every country and it is very helpful for every person. These
trend
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trends
has
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have
have had
 many positive and negative effects. I will discuss
this
 opinion in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
To begin
 with, there are many advantages of online
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
shipping
 for individuals because people can easily buy new things with the help of online
website s
a computer connected to the internet that maintains a series of web pages on the World Wide Web
websites
 and people do not spend more time of these type of activities because they have more pressure of
there
of them or themselves
their
 work so
this
 online
sites
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site
 are save
there
of them or themselves
their
 time as well as people can buy
lot
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lots
 of products for office and home. In
this
 way more and more people like to buy new goods from online websites
On the other hand
, there are many negative effects of
these trend
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this trend
these trends
 because many people buy
lot
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lots
 of things from online sites and they do not use these things. They waste their money
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, sometimes companies show
good image
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a good image
 of their products on their sites and when a person buy products and it gives bad products as well as things
of
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about
 their customer
.
Accept space
.
 So that
onliy
and nothing more
only
online
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
 has many disadvantages for every person. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think online
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
 is very helpful for everyone because
every thing
all things
everything
 is available in online companies and people buy easily buy new
product s
commodities offered for sale
products
 as well as companies do home delivery
to
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of
 products.
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